J.C. Belding

This was really cool. I liked your concepts a lot. The only thing I would do is make the wording slightly more poetic. I think that would really improve it.

Great poem. Seriously, this is really good. I love how, well, poetic it sound. It was a pleasure reading it.

Silence. All he ever heard. All he ever knew. And so, Silent He became. A brother of the wind. A kinsman of the shadow. Silence. He abides in the void, ...

I enjoyed your ending a lot. But that spelling error with "there" instead of their and some of the wording, most of which has been commented on before, makes the ...

Good poem and good concepts. The only thing is a couple lines weren't very clear (at least to me) near the end. One of these is, "(Not that I want ...

Thanks for all the stars and compliments. Means a lot.

In the heartlands of the northern plain, Among the frozen spires of rock and stone, Lies the tower. A window or door it does not suffer, For such folly of ...

Great job! Very nice imagery and wording. Just one tiny thing on your 6th to last line: you should change the does topast tenseto make the line sound more appropriate. ...

Great poem and nice details. The only thing I would recommend is adjusting your meter a bit so it flowsmore smoothly. Simple edits like changing "Thoughts of pain gone." to ...

This is pretty good. Nice imagrey but I think it really needs to be expanded. I felt like the poem was just beggining when I finished.

Very nice ideas and themes. The only real problem is that the meter is rather bumpy. Trying to workon smoothing it out and you'll have an excellent poem.

Thanks for the advice. I can't believe I didn't catch that mistake earlier.

Intresting poem. I really liked your first stanza, but you should divide your second one into two just before "Across the ages;" Also, your second to last line kind of ...

This has lots of charm to it. Just two suggestions: try to shorten the list of qualities of the knight just a bit to give each more meaning. Also try ...

Pretty cool. I know it was said before, but if you use more elaborate vocabulary the poem will be a lot better. Some of the wording also took away from ...